Changes to Edit

The edit itself needs to be tightened up, which in turn will also cut down the work within the animation process.

The first problem is the pacing of the edit. There are large gaps of no speech in which makes the piece feel too slow. Feedback from my tutor suggested that I have continuous speech through-out to maintain a pace. To do this  I will need to add speech in-between the main dream sequence, during the first section of the film. The new lines I will be adding are as follows:

 'As I pass by a waterfall, deep within the cave stands a shadow of a women. She says....'

'The dreams kept on repeating and I did nothing to stop them.'

Along with adding lines, it is also important to begin cutting the script. Certain themes run through the piece and therefore lines need to reinforce them but not repeat the same ideal in multiple ways. The section, 'Bargaining' mentioned a deeper reflection of the dream from the beginning of the film. Therefore cutting lines from this section would not take anything away from the story or what Mazikki had mentioned before.

As discussed with my tutor I will think about cutting:

•     Any repeated references to winter coming back
•     when Mazikki talks about questions.
•     Visually, cut some blur shots- tentacle shot- because it has no reference
•     'Summer ending'

Along with this titles will also be cut, placing text over visuals to give it that sense of flow.

The work will be achieved with these cuts made. I have also realised that without these cuts, the length would be longer than expected. This was the right choice to avoid the film becoming long winded and dry.